<>改下吧,语法有错哦!首先wonferful 只有一个L,其次后一句,和前一句是两个完整的句子,还是不要用逗号连接为好,觉得用整个句子这样表达语法上完整些:Welcome to the world of English in which you can find friends and you will find here a wonderful and magic world! Come on, and join us.</P>
<>另外说下的是</P><>楼主的改正还是不够彻底</P><>标题里的有多余的累赘</P><>Welcome to the world of English in which you can find friends and you will find here a wonderful and magic world! Come on, and join us.</P><>红色字部分觉得可以省略,"and"出现两个find, </P><>然后改为"~~in which you will find friends and a wonderful and magic world"</P>
<>看过去应该是没错的, 差不多是这个意思</P><>但要仔细斟酌 还是有问题, 根据SUNY的纠正,倒可以改改 重复的那几个词 </P><>我的意见:Welcome to the world of English in which you will meet friends , you will find here a wonderful and magic world !</P><>Come on , join us !</P><>另外大海那句话相当的棒 : If not now , when ?</P><> If not you, who ?</P>
<>看过去应该是没错的, 差不多是这个意思</P>
<>但要仔细斟酌 还是有问题, 根据SUNY的纠正,倒可以改改 重复的那几个词 </P>
<>我的意见:Welcome to the world of English in which you will meet friends , you will find here a wonderful and magic world !</P>
<>Come on , join us !</P>
<>另外大海那句话相当的棒 : If not now , when ?</P>
<> If not you, who ?</P>
<>hehe, it's funny!</P><>but for me i think it's nothing, for a beginner, u should take care of the expressions, but now the most important is your oral English, how to communicate with others. </P>